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Originally Posted by igo4bmx
sounds ok- but i would start the paragraph with vague yet pleasant descriptions of what it is...
something like
"Every thursday night, you can hear the sound of turbochargers spinning, the deep rumble of exhaust systems, with the sound of mild conversation in the background...."
i think that would make it more interesting to start the paragraph very descriptive then go from there.
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Advice taken. Also, the paragraph has to have a topic sentence in the beginning, and im thinking that can be it